The Watchfinder General – Friday Fictioneers, July 2017

Copyright Kent Bonham


Aaron sells watches on the beach.

He proudly totes an aluminium briefcase stuffed with his wares, his arms wreathed in watches both ‘new’ and ‘used’.

Aaron knows everything there is to know about time; he should… he’s done some.

He sells to the dusties, who’re stealing time with pills and potions…

… to druggies, living on borrowed time…

… to chancers, making time with the local girls…

… and drifters, wasting it.

Today Aaron and I stroll beside a stinking, crimson sea, kicking bleached fishbones beneath sickly green skies.

“No watches today?”

Aaron shrugs.

“We’ve run out of time,” he says.

101 words this week; I had one left over from last week, if you remember.   I hope Friday Fictioneers can see the link between the photo and this story.  And I hope I don’t get sued for it…  🙂   You can never be too sure these days.  You can, however, be sure that our gracious hostess, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields will be presiding over our court today.  Thanks Rochelle.

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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74 Responses to The Watchfinder General – Friday Fictioneers, July 2017

  1. neilmacdon says:

    How interesting that we both did time this week.

    Liked by 1 person

  2. Dear Sandra,

    “Not Guilty!” says herself. However, you are guilty of one thing and that’s writing a wonderful, gritty story. Dare I say, ‘timely?’ (I had to…besides, I’m still working on my first cup of coffee. 😉 )



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    • Sandra says:

      Thank you Rochelle, I appreciate your commenting. Especially whilst you’re still on your first cup of coffee – I know how tough that can be. 🙂 Have a lovely day!


  3. Nice sketch. Makes me wonder how many of the “used” watches come from swimmers who left them lying on their towels!


  4. A very beautiful story rendered in your trademark beautiful writing. I just love your writings, Sandra.


  5. Sue says:

    Nicely penned as ever, Sandra


  6. wmqcolby says:

    Awesome, Sandra. The time metaphor and the way you worked it was brilliant. I liked the ending line where it put it in perspective and kind of a diabolical sense of humor. Made sense to me.

    Five out of five Bulova Watch Times.


  7. granonine says:

    Excellent build-up to the surprise at the end 🙂


  8. Jelli says:

    Love the way that tale spun around the dial. Out of time, indeed…. 🙂


  9. Rowena says:

    Very clever piece, Sandra. Love how you put it together.
    It also reminded me of a trip to Hong Kong many years ago where I often heard the chime: “Copy watch! Copy watch!”
    xx Rowena


  10. Mike says:

    I’m always amazed at how great a story you can pack into 100 words (or in this case 101 words). A great read.


  11. James says:

    And there goes the environment, Poof.


  12. lillian says:

    Smiled at this line “Aaron knows everything there is to know about time; he should… he’s done some.”
    I like the way you have this set up — the telling as well as the placement of the sentences.
    Really enjoyed your post here today.


  13. gahlearner says:

    I absolutely love your use of time here right to the bitter ending. This time I don’t get the connection to the picture, but that’s probably some cultural reference i don’t get.


    • Sandra says:

      Thanks Gabi. The link is the recent VW emissions scandal where they appear to have been ‘doctoring’ the software for measuring the harmful emissions from their engines. I wasn’t sure what kind of coverage this had ‘enjoyed’ around the world, but it was fairly widely publicised in Europe.

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      • gahlearner says:

        Yes that, well, it’s a german company, it still is all over the news here. And one by one, the other companies turn out to not be little angels either. I guess I was thrown by Aaron, I thought he would be someone everyone knows but me (which would be the normal state). 😉

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  14. pennygadd51 says:

    Nice story, Sandra. A cautionary tale!


  15. Simply brilliant. and your subtle reference to the VW scandal was inspired.

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  16. michael1148humphris says:

    Our VW has just had its emissions reset, we are not pleased, but I was pleased with your story.


  17. Iain Kelly says:

    Excellent work as always Sandra.


  18. rgayer55 says:

    Masterfully constructed, Sandra. I once wrote a poem about being slaves to time. How it controls us instead of the other way around. The automakers are all guilty of scandals. The big news here over the last few months has been air bags. They either don’t work or they kill the person they’re supposed to protect.


  19. I love the narrative voice in this, Sandra, so strong for such a small piece.


  20. A Writer's Beginning says:

    Great story; you’re such a talented writer! Time is such an important thing, yet so hard to control… lovely ending and lovely story 🙂


  21. That’s lovely, although I can’t see how the prompt took you there. But who cares. A good read.


  22. Moon says:

    Terrific,Sandra. ‘Bleached fish bones ‘, ‘stinking crimson sea ‘and ‘sickly green skies’- horrible man-made disasters , you have so brilliantly painted with words. Why does he say ” we have run out of time ? ”
    Regards and best wishes..


  23. Nan Falkner says:

    Awesome story this week Sandra! I hope our civilization never comes to this but everyone fights over everything. Sad when we learned of Volkswagons misleading the consumer.


  24. Dale says:

    You are one smart lady.. brilliant take


  25. Loved how you worked the time theme here. The future is not looking good.


  26. draliman says:

    Nice, but hopefully not prophetic. Nice use of “time”.


  27. Great description of the sea and fish. Let’s hope it never comes to that.


  28. Matthew Burgos says:

    The value of time as an underlying approach–or at least to me. What an eye-opening piece. Thank you.


  29. Liz Young says:

    Chilling – For most of your story I was visualising the watch-sellers I used to see regularly on Tenerife beach, then you hit me with a crimson sea.


  30. Aaron and time… this post say everything about time. he sells used watches too. interesting.
    it is time to hit bed for me. good night.

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  31. Laurie Bell says:

    Wow great prompt take. Time and all it’s meanings. I wonder where he got thrm all?

    Liked by 1 person

  32. A message subtly passed across’
    Great writing.


  33. plaridel says:

    perhaps it’s time to lay low. they’re being watched.

    Liked by 1 person

  34. The all elusive time and the ways it’s abused.
    I very much like the way you’ve written it.

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  35. Michael Wynn says:

    Loved the play on time and it’s many manifestations. Great stuff

    Liked by 1 person

  36. I love how you brought this full circle.

    Liked by 1 person

  37. Sarah Ann says:

    Really enjoyed the cast of characters you painted in the middle of this, and descriptions at the end – bleached fishbones etc. Such a poignant ending, but maybe it’s time Aaron called time on this life.


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