A Heart of Ice – Friday Fictioneers, December 2017

Copyright Dale Rogerson

She no longer felt cold.  Indeed, if she could have, she would have slipped out of her nightdress, baring her burning skin to the gentle caress of the snow.

But only her hands moved, her arms long since numbed.

She slurred his name.

Then spelt it out carefully in the snow.

Allan…

Headlights flashed along the drive – a car door slammed.  Help at last.

“Here…” she whimpered.

Footsteps approached, halted.

Slowly, thoroughly, thoughtfully, snow was scuffed, then smoothed over the name.

“Dogged little cow, aren’t you?” muttered Allan, as thick flakes obliterated his retreating footprints.

Such a cold, cold heart…

 Rochelle leads the Friday Fictioneers into December, with all that that entails.  Still, it’s got to be better than November…  If you have a 100 word story in response to the prompt… join us!  Thanks again, Rochelle.

About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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58 Responses to A Heart of Ice – Friday Fictioneers, December 2017

  1. neilmacdon says:

    You are the queen of the chillers, Sandra

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  2. Iain Kelly says:

    Allan has clearly had enough of her…

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  3. Dear Sandra,

    Allan’s heart is beyond ice…it’s stone. Chilling piece that left me shivering. As always well written.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  4. Martin Cororan says:

    Oh wow, that’s genuinely disturbing!

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  5. Sue says:

    Beyond disturbing….

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  6. granonine says:

    In my line of work, he’d be identified as a psychopath. No heart, no sympathy,no compassion, no remorse. Beyond cold.

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  7. Chilling (in more ways than one!)

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  8. Nasty Allan. Hope she haunts him forever.

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  9. James says:

    Yikes. The killer comes back to make sure the job is done.

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  10. Like a scene from a horror movie! Brilliantly written Sandra.

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  11. Dale says:

    That was most chillingly done, Sandra! Oh what a cad – even if she has been relentless…

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  12. Wow! Heart of ice, indeed! Well told.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  13. newstylemode says:

    I had to read this a couple of times… how awful. Beautifully written.

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  14. pennygadd51 says:

    Wow, that is flash fiction at its most dramatic! Superbly written, Sandra.

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  15. Jelli says:

    Oh, ouch, that was vicious beyond vicious. Great story.

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  16. Joy Pixley says:

    He returned just to insult her again? What a wonderfully evil villain you’ve cooked up. I second the hope that she’ll come back to haunt him!

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  17. wow! Nasty man. You have a way of bring on the bleak. In a good way.

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  18. Just when there was a spark of hope!!! Very creepy. And oh so well done.

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  19. Brilliantly wicked! Absolutely, unreservedly, loved it! And wish I had written it 🙂

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  20. draliman says:

    Whatever’s going on here, I’ve decided I don’t like Allan.

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  21. bbryanthomas says:

    A very good “chilling” story

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  22. rgayer55 says:

    I think Allen is having an affair with the Ice Woman. Her tendencies appear to be rubbing off on him.

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  23. Liz Young says:

    That was chilling and excellent.

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  24. Mike says:

    A great story Sandra. So much drama in just 100 words.

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  25. Lynn Love says:

    That is black as pitch! Wonderfully written and suitably chilling

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  26. Susan says:

    Such evil! If Allen were female, Betty Davis would be perfect for the role.

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  27. Fluid Phrase says:

    Heart of ice indeed! Well written icy tale.

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  28. Jan Vanek says:

    Oh the chills you packed into those 100 words–it’s the imaginings of what’s to come. Nicely done!

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  29. Some people are just twisted and selfish. They don’t seem to have a conscience. Good writing as always, Sandra. —- Suzanne

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  30. This is cold as ice… cannot really understand… “cow” says a lot I think. If he’d said “b*tch” she could have been to blame to something else than growing old.

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  31. Dang! Cold hearted, indeed!

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  32. plaridel says:

    what a jerk. that’s no way to treat a lady.

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  33. subroto says:

    Another great story Sandra. Wonderful understated menace, I don’t think that I want to meet Allen in a dark alley.

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