In Too Deep – Friday Fictioneers, October 2020

CE Ayr


Mattie knew about women…  how to hook ‘em… how to… well, you know.

He once said when you dump a girl, do it in style.  Make it a day she’ll remember for the good stuff as well as the bad.

So he literally pushed the boat out for Charlene.  Wine, caviar, bobbing around in the bay all day before delivering the old ‘it’s not you, it’s me’ line.

Charlene’s a big girl… bigger’n Mattie.  Didn’t take it too well.

Mattie don’t sail no more; I hear he’s gettin’ down with the fishies these days.

Boat for sale.

One careless owner.


Thanks to CE Ayres for a photo that brings back lots of memories for me, an altogether different part of my life.  And thanks to Rochelle for leading out the Friday Fictioneers every week, a port in the storm of what’s become almost endless everyday life for most of us.

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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48 Responses to In Too Deep – Friday Fictioneers, October 2020

  1. Reena Saxena says:

    i like the play on words. We’ve struck the same theme in different ways 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

  2. neilmacdon says:

    I liked the echo of “for sale. baby shoes. never worn”

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  3. Carole and Barrie Grant says:

    You’ve done it again!!!!! Congratulations. We had a conversation with an off shore sailor who says she left the boat before this episode because she had planned it in detail and was afraid to trust herself if she stayed.


    • Sandra says:

      You know, Carole, I think I met the same woman. If not it was someone in a very similar position and we also came across her husband (very briefly) and fully understood the nature of her concerns. 🙂 Thanks for reading.


  4. ceayr says:

    Seems like Mattie didn’t know as much about the ladies as he thought, hmm…
    Your usual delightfully structured piece, Sandra.

    PS I ain’t Pam, it’s just ‘Ayr’!


  5. Anita says:

    Glad Charlene could protect herself!
    Boat will be sold. Only if boats could tell their stories…


  6. Dear Sandra,

    Mattie had it coming. I feel no remorse for him. Well done as always.




  7. Oh, very good, Sandra! What a take on the photo prompt. 🙂

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos


  8. 😂 A hilarious start to my morning. I love your take on the old “let her down gently”.


  9. Tannille says:

    Something rather satisfying about this. Loved the tone.


  10. Nobbinmaug says:

    Well, that’s not how he wanted to get out of the relationship.


  11. granonine says:

    He picked the wrong woman to wrong, didn’t he?


  12. Dora says:

    Enjoyed this, Sandra! You never disappoint as a storyteller 🙂


  13. Finally, it’s comeuppance for Mattie. Deep down, he’ll regret very deeply (pun fully intentional!)


  14. pennygadd51 says:

    Nice wry story, Sandra. Great title, too!


  15. Dale says:

    Haha! Take that, Mattie… Your “ship has sailed”… just not as you hoped… Good one!


  16. msjadeli says:

    Tsk tsk Mattie, you always wait until you’re on land to give the boot. Wonderful tale-telling, Sandra.


  17. James McEwan says:

    Clearly Mattie didn’t understand the rules of relationships: always get the girl to dump you. Well she did in the end – but for the wrong reason.


  18. Mattie obviously wasn’t good at reading women!


  19. She’ll certainly remember that day, with great satisfaction!

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  20. draliman says:

    A pretty harsh ending for him, though he did have it coming.

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  21. You create a powerful scenario so skilfully, and a satisfying ending, just deserts.

    Liked by 1 person

  22. Mattie didn’t think that one through. Great last line!

    Liked by 1 person

  23. subroto says:

    Ooh nice one. Mattie is now firmly anchored as a shoal provider.

    Liked by 1 person

  24. Careless indeed. Great story!

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