The one-word prompt I chose this week from Five Sentence Fiction’s past prompts was ‘Armour’. (or Armor) 🙂 I’d been just a bit to late to post it before the link closed last week.
Geoffrey tries not to think about his life before the transformation, though sometimes he remembers, with pain, the slow, depressing fusion of one grey month into another, with nothing to break the monotony of his daily grind.
But recently everything has changed for Geoffrey, and the whole world has opened up before him, allowing him to visit countries he’s never dreamed of, to meet friends from every corner of the world, and to talk with people who’ve experienced situations or events of which he could never have conceived in his earlier life.
He’s become supremely comfortable, almost cavalier, in his relationships with the opposite sex, and there have been more girlfriends in the last few months than he could ever have contemplated, sometimes several at the same time, and one or two of them, like Amanda, securing a special place in his heart for a while.
But now he gazes sadly at Amanda’s message on the screen before him, eleven words that herald the death of yet another deeply fulfilling, enthralling and at times passionate relationship.
“I’m dying to meet you face to face, how about it?”
Ooooh, ouch. What a fantastic ending and so apropos to the modern fixation with anonymous social media.
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Thanks for commenting Cara. It’s sad but true, I guess, for a lot of people.
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Wow and I also ditto all of Cara’s comments too.
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Thanks for commenting Jo-Anne. 🙂
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Wonderfully descriptive, and supremely sad that his world revolves around the internet instead of interconnecting with real life. The ending was a surprise – I was thinking he had really turned his life around only to find that nothing has really changed. He is still trapped.
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The above comment should have shown up like this. The tatergril60 link goes to a test blog only. Thanks!
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Thanks for commenting Linda. Glad you liked it.
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Ahhh–modern love! Great snapshot!
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Thanks Jennifer. Been to yours, loved it. 🙂
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Oooh, you have good insight into the younger crowd. Good stuff. http://jemcogdell.blogspot.com/2012/04/fsf-flash-fiction-runway.html
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I wish I did have good insight Jeanelaine, they’re a complete mystery to me. I only stand and observe. 🙂
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Great descriptive words used in this piece! I loved the ending and I have known a few people who have been in the “online” dating world…..Doesn’t always turn out the way you want it to!
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I’ve not been there, but I always think there’s plenty of scope for writers there!
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So creative, and I was totally not expecting the ending! Wonderful idea, and the way you withheld that vital piece of information is great! Awesome take on the prompt!
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Thank you Claire. Glad you liked it.
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Haha, brilliant ending. It casts the whole story, as well as the word choice, into a new light. This was a very enjoyable read.
/ Rain
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Thanks for commenting, glad you enjoyed it.
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This is really fantastic!!! Such an awesome portrayal 🙂
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Thanks for dropping by Lillie, glad you liked it.
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