Not All Bad News Then… (Five Sentence Fiction, May 2011)

This week’s prompt was ‘Sombrero’.

The bustle of the arrivals area was punctuated by shouts of  “Hola! Hola!” and Phyllida turned to regard the elderly couple waving wildly as they trundled out of baggage reclaim behind a trolley piled high with glossy baby-pink suitcases.

Dressed in a turquoise and silver shell suit, complete with a bright orange sombrero hanging down his back, a straw donkey under one arm and a similarly shell-suited blonde woman on the other, her father cut a truly spectacular figure for a former bank manager.

“I told you all about Chardonnay here, “said her father, pushing his giggling escort forward to envelop his daughter in a suffocating micro-climate of heady perfume, tempered with duty-free gin, “and have we got a surprise for you, my dear.”

“Oh God no, they’ve got married,” thought Phyllida, who had imagined her father gliding gently into old age beneath temperate Spanish skies, armed with nothing more challenging than a good book and an annual subscription to the local bowling club.

“Chardonnay and I are setting up home together,” announced her father proudly, “but not only that, she’s just heard she’s been awarded her doctorate in Geriatric Medicine.”

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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18 Responses to Not All Bad News Then… (Five Sentence Fiction, May 2011)

  1. Interesting take on not judging people by appearances. Good job, Sandra. I haven’t written mine yet. Still ruminating on the challenge, but drop by anyway. I have another post up you might like.


  2. I absolutely love this!! The details are so sharp I can see it like a movie playing out in my mind’s eye!! Wonderful!! 🙂


  3. I love the details in this piece too but even moreso, I am so impressed that you were able to reflect the personalities involved as well as the emotions. Great!


  4. jeanelaine says:

    This is LOL funny. Loved it.


  5. You paint a vivid picture. Wonderful attention to detail. Love the touch of humour, too.
    i’m visiting from Five Sentence Fiction. *waves*


  6. susanne brindle says:

    Fantastic – reads like a scene from Manchester Airport Arrivals Hall UK – I used to work there! lol


  7. Sandra says:

    You got it! I used to live near there, and that was my usual departure point for many years. 🙂


  8. The details are vivid and well thought out! Really great job 🙂


  9. Sandra says:

    Thanks Lillie – appreciated.


  10. I could envision myself standing in the airport watching this all play out. Great imagery, loved it!


  11. Judee says:

    It always amazes me how much you manage to fit into these “five sentence” wonders, giving them a beginning, middle and end all in one swoop. 🙂


  12. Sandra says:

    Thanks Judee. 🙂 I think I pushed the sentence length to the limit on this one though.


  13. I love the description of the holiday makers in their shell suits and carryng the tacky gifts. The humour is sharp and very witty. An unexpected ending that made me chuckle. xx


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