Innocent! (100 Word Challenge for Grown Ups, August 2012)

This week’s prompt for the 100 Word Challenge for Grown Ups was the phrase …together the flames…

She stands silently, head bowed as they light the kindling beneath her, her dark locks shielding her face.

The hem of her robe stains brown before curling and disintegrating in the gathering inferno as together the flames and the wind collaborate, inching her inexorably towards her death.

He turns away, he who’d denounced her for witchcraft, when her only crime was rejecting the smouldering fires within his heart.

A roar from the crowd; a white column of doves unfurls from the flames, coils gently around her, and – she’s gone.

He falls to the ground screaming, as the flames of hell lick at his soul.

About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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22 Responses to Innocent! (100 Word Challenge for Grown Ups, August 2012)

  1. Sally says:

    That sent shivers up and down my spine. I was there with them both. Great writing.

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  2. Loved the extra sinister touch when the man was consumed by flames

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  3. Gilly Gee says:

    Brilliant Sandra, I love the column of doves and him meeting his maker!

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  4. Oh, I’m hoping the flames of hell were just in his head and he’ll have the rest of his lifetime to think about what he’s done. Let insanity eat him. Great story, Sandra.

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  5. Miriam says:

    Beautiful writing. I love the way flames link all the parts.

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  6. Vivid description and details … I could feel the flames.
    A great visual throughout. Very nice ….

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  7. jfb57 says:

    Stunning! As I was reading I hoped there would be a knight on a white charger! Brilliant!

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  8. ventahl says:

    Wasn’t expecting that! Doves and Hell and justice. In an ideal world, this is what should happen. Only in the novels though …

    ps think last line reads better like this:
    And he screamed as Hellfire rent the ground to claim his soul.
    only IMO though πŸ˜‰

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  9. Oooh great idea, the witch trials never occurred to me but it’s a great subject for this. Brilliant use of the prompt, which I barely noticed… I love that the flames took down the accuser in the end.

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  10. How very dark and even tragic in the end. Excellent work!

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  11. Mayumi-H says:

    Sorry so late…!
    Such vivid emotion, especially from the man. The use of all that fire imagery – I love the bit about the smouldering fires within his heart – is very well done. Nice transference at the end, too!

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