Those Awkward Moments

The one word prompt from Lillie McFerrin’s Five Sentence fiction this week is ‘Awkward’.


“So tell me Jenny, how is it going with my husband then?’ queried Sarah, as she carefully set her coffee cup back on its saucer and reached out for another chocolate éclair.

Her friend choked, spraying the pristine white tablecloth with half-masticated vanilla slice, causing the occupants of nearby tables to look up in initial consternation, quickly tempered with distaste.

“I’ve always found,” continued Sarah, picking at a well-manicured fingernail, “that men are so much more…er… creative, in the earlier stages of a relationship, but then familiarity sets in and everything becomes routine – until, of course, someone comes along to inject a little long-overdue spice into the situation.”

Riveted to her seat, Jenny glanced wildly around the tearoom, cheeks crimson, and eyes watering under the speculative gaze of the other customers.

“Are we nearly through here, do you think?” said Sarah, picking up her handbag, “because if we are, you must let me get the bill; I rather think I owe you, my dear.”



About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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27 Responses to Those Awkward Moments

  1. Oh, to have the balls…

    Nice one, Sandra 🙂


  2. Andrew says:

    This is excellent. I was riveted from start to finish.


  3. Paul says:

    Quite close to perfection. I loved it. If I had overheard this conversation I probably would have followed them to hear more, and continue following once they split. Trouble is, which woman would be more interesting to follow?


  4. sue Cottrill says:

    One up to Sarah. Love it .


  5. Sisyphus47 says:

    Erm… so realistic! And yet, would you? 😀


  6. Jo-Anne Teal says:

    Sandra, you have done it again! Perfect pinpoint on the situation – you got right to the heart of the matter. So very well told! The dialogue…er…monologue is spot on. Loved it!


  7. Mayumi-H says:

    Devious and delicious, Sandra. I really enjoy your ballsy ladies! 🙂


  8. Sarah remains so calm and unflustered… and Jenny didn’t see it coming! Brilliant!


  9. beebeesworld says:

    nice work -Ive been on the computer for over a week=sick-then the cable got messed up, I had 977 messages piled u, so obviously I wont be able to do a lot-still not well-rough week. Hope you are doing well–beebeesworld


  10. TheOthers1 says:

    Wow! Yea, that’s the definition of awkward. I mean, I could see that happening. Nicely done.


  11. Whoa! If I were Jenny, I would be thinking twice about continuing my relationship with Sarah’s husband. Not a woman you’d want to stay on the wrong side of, I’d say.

    Really enjoyed this, Sandra!


  12. ahblack57 says:

    Wonderful take on the prompt. You had me at, “how is it going with my husband.” Start to finish, top to bottom, that was perfect. I’m glad I wasn’t munching on my morning “vanilla slice” or I’d be cleaning off my monitor. Thanks for kicking off my day.


  13. Wickedly good! I love how blase’ Sarah acts throughout, as she calmly puts her friend in her place 🙂


  14. rgayer55 says:

    You played that hand extremely well, Sandra. Awkward indeed!


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