Reaching Out For You, (Friday Fictioneers January 2013)

An interesting photo prompt from Friday Fictioneers this week, courtesy of Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.   Time for a change, I think.

Genre:  Paranormal

The babble of unholy voices tumbles from the dangling earpiece, then ceases abruptly as I touch it,  leaving only a gentle hissing on the line; softened wax begins to ooze down the menorah, yet there are no candles.

I stare into the face in the photograph, as his mouth curves into a cynical smile.

The red crayon scrawls on the photographic border.

“You must come to me.”

“I’m needed here,” I say.

A tinny voice echoes from the earpiece.

“Come now. Or tomorrow there will be no ‘here’.”

For all your sakes, I must go.

Will he never let me be?


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About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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70 Responses to Reaching Out For You, (Friday Fictioneers January 2013)

  1. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Sandra,

    What a lovely spooky tale to wake up to. Your spirit voice seems a little bit evil, if that is even possible. I suppose you are either evil…or not. In any event, I thank goodness for her that this is only a story. “Don’t go into the light….”

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  2. Oooooh, Sandra. Eerie little story. I love the way you incorporated each object. As I write the phone in the photo is on the antique desk beside me. So far it’s silent…
    Another good one.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

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  3. Abraham says:

    Haunting.
    Excellent piece, as always.

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  4. Mehn, damn Gorgeous! [Can I use that word for a story?] Very creative use of the prompt!!! 🙂

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  5. Eerie! I’m staying away from any antique phones, that’s for sure! Nice job.

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  6. JKBradley says:

    Right up my alley!

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  7. If I were Rochelle, I’d be getting all that spooky stuff out of my house ASAP! Your first two paragraphs especially had me seriously on edge. Shudder!

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  8. Don’t believe everything you hear…
    Randy

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  9. muZer says:

    Oh! boy.. She’s in quite a pickle. Spooky story, just reading it gave me the heebie-jeebies! Great usage of the prompt objects.

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  10. elappleby says:

    A spooky tale – we must have similarly strange brains because I thought ‘voices from beyond’ too when I saw the prompt. Nice work!

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  11. Thank goodness our antique phone doesn’t do any of this!! I’ve now made it through three rows of stories one after the other and have to stop for a bit, but what a last story!!

    janet

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  12. nightlake says:

    this was scary..better to hide that photo and never look at it..very well done

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  13. wmqcolby says:

    Yikes!!! I want to sleep downstairs now instead of anywhere NEAR an attic! Sandra, that was GREAT! I just HAD to drop everything to see your story … I wasn’t disappointed, as usual! Congratulations!!!

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  14. kz says:

    spooky! and mysterious.. makes me wonder about her relationship with that man,, a great story ^^

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  15. Debra Kristi says:

    Oh, the pressure. Gotta love those demanding voices that call you up on old phones asking you to save the world. Pretty cool flash.

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  16. claireful says:

    Ooh, spooky. And very different from your usual writing, but definitely as good.

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  17. rgayer55 says:

    I could hear the theme from Twilight Zone playing in the background. Good thing the voice didn’t ask ME to save the world. We’d all be in a lot of trouble.

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  18. unspywriter says:

    Very chilling and downright scary. The tension builds throughout. Nice job.

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/my-fair-clue/

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  19. writeondude says:

    Spooky stuff. Well done in getting all four unconected items in!

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  20. wow good job with building this story, tension and foreboding.

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  21. Wow, what a perfect storm of hauntings. Pretty spooky, if you ask me. I don’t know what I’d do, if I couldn’t walk away from it.

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  22. Hi Sandra,
    Very clever how you work all the objects into your sinister tale. Thanks for pointing out the misspelling in my story. I have it fixed now, thanks to you. ron

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  23. Very spooky. Where is she going? I must know!

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  24. elmowrites says:

    I’m seeing Rochelle in your story – looking at the photo and wondering whether to save the Fictioneers or let us burn! Masterful as ever, Sandra.

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  25. Tom Poet says:

    Great work Sandra. Spooky…I swear those crayons moved when I read this story….
    Tom

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  26. tedstrutz says:

    I’d get rid of all that stuff… except the world might end. She better go.

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  27. Oh my, perhaps I shan’t answer my phone tomorrow! You took this photo to the dark side, and did it well.

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  28. boomiebol says:

    Spooky…very good take on the prompt

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  29. Sarah Ann says:

    Spooky and sinsiter. (I’ve changed my plans to sort through some old photos this weekend.) It would be great to have a follow-up on why he can’t leave your MC be.

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  30. Tough choice here. Sounds like the spirit is actually warning against impeding disaster, maybe it’s better just to go along.

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  31. Parul says:

    And here I have been sitting and wrecking my brain on how I am never able to write a horror story!
    This was spooky Sandra. I like it!!

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  32. It’s not easy to type a comment with my hair standing on end! Good job – every sentence is scarier than the one before.

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  33. vbholmes says:

    So who is “he”? I read all the comments and replies and no clues. Good story, Sandra.

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  34. Spooky, Sandra. I like how you moved between the photographic and the earpiece both communicating. I would definitely be freaked out by this. Well done. – Amy

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  35. Sunshine says:

    yikes! glad he didn’t come crawling out of the phone…then i would have screamed!!
    goose bump reading…i love it!! ❤

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  36. rich says:

    “will he never let me be” so this has happened before then? oh, poor dear, pestered from the ‘beyond’ over and over. well done.

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  37. Anne Orchard says:

    Sounds like they have sacrificed themselves so the world can carry on, so may I just say thank you. Great tense atmosphere, well written, and top points for including all the items.

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  38. YJ says:

    Spooky…he has an obligation to go for the sake of others. Will he return? I really enjoyed.

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