Specially Chartered Flight (Friday Fictioneers, February 2013)

Throughout the day a straggling line of bewildered souls meandered through the airport to a previously unseen check-in desk beneath a blue screen showing a destination of which few had heard.

As the sun sank in a ball of orange flame, the last of the passengers boarded the plane which had waited all day on the airport perimeter.  Pulling back unaided, it trundled unannounced to the head of the runway.

As perplexed air traffic controllers looked on, the aircraft sped down the runway, before soaring into the gathering twilight

Next day the world read about the events that had taken place in (…………)  *

*  Insert as applicable:  Rwanda, Syria, Srebrenica, Oradour sur Glane….. the list is seemingly endless.  😦

Friday Fictioneers photo prompt this week comes courtesy of Rich Voza.  Dark again, sorry.

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About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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80 Responses to Specially Chartered Flight (Friday Fictioneers, February 2013)

  1. Interesting take. We never know where we are going, even if we know.

    Blessings,
    Shenine

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  2. nightlake says:

    suspense..and well written

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  3. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Sandra,

    You have outdone yourself this week. What a haunting and moving tale you wrote. It reads like a dirge or a requiem and takes your reader on a flight of remembrance. You are a masterful storyteller, Sandra.

    The hyper link to the video was just right and capped off your effort with quiet grace. I am speechless.

    Thank you.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  4. Dear Sandra,
    It’s good that I can type my comments on this because I certainly couldn’t find an audible voice to speak them. Stunning. Well written as always. If this was a painting I’d refer to it as “mixed media.” Nice blend of writing and video. Thought provoking…touching… infuriating…
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

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  5. deanabo says:

    This is really good writing. Your descriptions are amazing.

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  6. As always, beautifully written but this one really left a lot up to our imaginations (which isn’t a bad thing.)

    janet

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  7. kz says:

    great writing, haunting tale and very vivid descriptions.. 🙂

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  8. rich says:

    i’m going to leave that line blank. i don’t want to know where it is. maybe i should stop watching the news too. that’s “reality television.” well done.

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  9. So much trouble in the world, always brewing above and below the surface. Interesting take, Sandra!

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  10. This is a very well written story. I enjoyed it immensely.

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  11. JKBradley says:

    I think I’ve boarded that plane before.

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    • Sandra says:

      I think I’ve overdone the metaphor angle on this JK. It was meant to be a consignment of souls leaving for the next world after yet another atrocity. Sometimes the stories work, other times they don’t. 😉

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      • Esther says:

        I don’t think the metaphor is heavy-handed here. I found it delicate. I had to pay close attention to make sure I knew what was going on, which I always enjoy.

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  12. there’s a cadence to this piece, a quiet rhythm, poetic.

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  13. Silent Kim says:

    Your dark ending brings awareness to the dark places in the world. That makes this an exceptional story.

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  14. Too close for comfort. Troubling times indeed.

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  15. claireful says:

    Very beautiful and sad this Sandra. Well done.

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  16. muZer says:

    Very well written with such a sad ending.

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  17. petrujviljoen says:

    I think I understood that your story meant it as a flight to the ‘other side’.

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  18. unspywriter says:

    Very well done, and I got what you meant right away. And we can’t fill in the blank because, unfortunately, there may be others eventually added to the list. Very evocative, and I’m sure I’ll recall this throughout the day.

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  19. elappleby says:

    Very dark and haunting this week, Sandra. I thought it was brilliant – and the ‘insert as applicable’ bit at the end was inspired. What a sad world it is sometimes.

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  20. Tom Poet says:

    Cupcake….I get the feeling I am taking the subway!

    Tom

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  21. Yes, the list is endless. How sad.

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  22. erinleary says:

    Subtle, full of mystery and portent. You paint a haunting picture.

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  23. t says:

    That’s 2 weeks in a row now that you’ve blown me away – nicely done!

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  24. Joe Owens says:

    YOu are right, there are too many places that can fill the empty space. The world is a scary place and we are blessed to be where this type of thing is mostly fiction rather than fact. You did a great job of sharing a chilling premise.

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  25. rgayer55 says:

    Great use of the prompt, Sandra. You’re a very talented and crafty writer.

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  26. vbholmes says:

    Powerful concept and very well done, Sandra–and yes, it is a bit obscure but that’s what makes it so successful.

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  27. boomiebol says:

    Very well written.

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  28. Very very well done. Good story with a great punch.

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  29. Hi Sandra. A brooding and moody take on the prompt. Dark is good – it’s what helps us appreciate the light!

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  30. Sandra says:

    Thanks Nick. You’re right. 🙂

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  31. wmqcolby says:

    Forget it! I’m flying in an airplane — REGARDLESS.
    Again, great writing as always, Sandra. It’s a treat I look forward to every week!

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  32. The flight leaving into twilight is indeed a strong picture. Thank you for sharing your writing.

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  33. Great suspense building, Sandra. I love the sun described as a “ball of orange flame.” It made think of the airplane blowing up. We can’t always trust we are being taken to the our correct destination. That’s an intriguing idea for a story.

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  34. elmowrites says:

    *Shudder* For once, we went completely different ways this time, Sandra.

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  35. annisik51 says:

    I enjoyed the multimedia nature of your story. Having lived in France I am familiar to a degree with the effects of occupation. I think. I am connected in that my great uncle is an unknown soldier commemorated at Vis-en-Artois. And I’ve visited, and the Normandy beaches and Vimy Ridge. You describe the nature of life too. We get on metaphorical planes but never really know where we will end up.

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    • Sandra says:

      Yes, we visit a lot of French villages on our travels, and I’m always surprised and intrigued by the number of memorials, together with stories that each village has to offer. I’ve not been through Oradoure, but if we ever end up that way I shall make a point of visiting. Thanks for commenting.

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  36. writeondude says:

    Nicely written, but a bit too mysterious for my poor brain. Nice moody piece.

    P.S. Looks like BCF has died a premature death. Shame, I was just getting into it.

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    • Sandra says:

      Thanks Pete. Yes, I was a bit annoyed about BCF, I put a lot of effort into that and into trying to get to grips with GIMP. It would be hard for them to get it going again now, I think.

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  37. Abraham says:

    Very well written, as always.
    I, for one, like your stories, dark or not. Maybe especially dark 🙂

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