Cinderella’s Prom Night (Friday Fictioneers, May 3013)

Photograph courtesy of Janet Webb

This week’s photo at Friday Fictioneers comes from Janet Webb.  Interesting one this.  Apologies to all those I couldn’t get to last week due to internet restrictions.  Should be easier this week – heading to Spain today.  🙂  There has to be some sun somewhere and I’m reliably informed that’s where it’s hiding.

“Tarty,” said Josie’s mother, lips tightly folded.

“Beautiful,” breathed her younger sister.

“Magnificent,” said the school heart-throb, his gaze lingering on her gleaming shoulders, the daring cleavage and her slender arms.

It had been an arduous climb for an acrophobic, clinging to the fire escape from the eighth floor to the twelfth. The best night of her life though… at least until midnight.

“Mine,” hissed the girl in the cloakroom, advancing menacingly with her friends.

“Oh s***” thought Josie, “game over.”

The black eye was relatively easy to explain; returning home in her underwear proved a tad more difficult.



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About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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53 Responses to Cinderella’s Prom Night (Friday Fictioneers, May 3013)

  1. Hannah says:

    That’s a clever story! I liked the last sentence. 🙂

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  2. Oops, checkout time at midnight. Love your modern day spin on Cinderella, Sandra.
    shalom,
    Rochelle

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  3. Shaking my head at how adroitly you tell your tales and how good they always are. Despite the inclement weather, you’ve moved away from the gloom and doom (more or less) in your stories. May it be so in your travels as well!

    janet

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  4. knew it was going to be excellent by the title.
    Great visuals for the mind to play in – from acrophobia to relegated to scivys
    🙂 for your week

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  5. You did a great job of hinting at most of the story but making it easy to follow. She sounds like a spunky, irrepressible kind of girl. 🙂

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  6. elmowrites says:

    A story in comments, that’s a new style on me, Sandra, but cleverly woven as always!

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  7. denmother says:

    I really liked all the perspectives on the dress at the start of the story. I’m glad she had some fun for all her trouble!

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  8. yerpirate says:

    Great build-up to the last line, and as always great pacing..

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  9. misskzebra says:

    Haha, I hope the venue wasn’t too far away from home!

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  10. ha, one thing is to loose one’s shoe. but a dress.. a tad mor difficult indeed. Tarty indeed – great story

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  11. Catherine Louise Gurganus says:

    Love it! Great take on this prompt.

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  12. Lol..returning home in your underwear..priceless.

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  13. wmqcolby says:

    HAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Great closer! Hilarious.

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  14. Jan Brown says:

    I hope that she had a private carriage to take her home in her undies…or was it a pumpkin? 🙂

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  15. Mystikel says:

    What a girl will do to feel like a princess. I bet the memories were worth it though 🙂

    Funny how if it’s fiction and audacious enough you just have to cheer the character on.

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  16. Linda Vernon says:

    Ha ha! I should say so. Wonderful story Sandra! 😀

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  17. So that’s what happens when Cinderella really blows the curfew! Very well done story!

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  18. nightlake says:

    really well-told, Sandra. and apart from Spain, the sun is also hiding in Singapore:)

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    • Sandra says:

      France was dreadful. It’s been as though there were a lid on the entire country. Couldn’t get over the blue skies when we eventually reached Spain. Hang on in there!

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  19. Joe Owens says:

    Disney always suspends reality giving Cindy her rags back. This seems a more real turn!

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  20. Trudy says:

    Great take on the fairy tale!

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  21. vb holmes says:

    I would guess an acrophobic would have less trouble losing her dress to toughies in the cloakroom than she would climbing from the eighth to the twelfth floor on an open fire escape. Now there’s a nightmare.

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  22. Given Josie’s mother’s initial reaction, I can well believe explaining her under-clothed return was difficult. 🙂

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  23. Sandra, you’re so clever! What a great spin on the Cinderella story. A modern-day one, for sure.

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  24. petrujviljoen says:

    Cinderella’s ugly sisters won this one. Very well told. Laughed.

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  25. unspywriter says:

    A great chuckle here! Cinderella’s dark side, perhaps?

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/put-on-your-red-dress/

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  26. kdillmanjones says:

    Great premise! Glad she at least got an amazing night out of it! Have a great time in España!

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  27. 40again says:

    Loved this. A great take on the Cinderella story. Loved the different opinions of the dress, you packed a lot in here.
    Take care in the sun 🙂
    Dee

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  28. neenslewy says:

    Loved it – fairytales sprung to my mind – your character had depth, interesting idea to add the acrophobia – it makes her fate even worse.

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  29. rgayer55 says:

    What a great story, Sandra. Certainly a night to remember and tell her grandchildren about. 🙂

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  30. Sarah Ann says:

    Fantastic. Very funny. Absolutely loved it. Naughty Josie.

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