The Last Word (Friday Fictioneers, August 2013)

copyright Jennifer Pendergast

Welcome to Friday Fictioneers again – the first one for August!  How quickly the summer is passing by. I suspect many of us will be writing along the same theme this week.  My first attempt pretty much mirrored Rochelle’s submission and I abandoned it.  So although it’s the broadly same theme, I tried to put a different slant on it.

“You don’t think it’s a bit… er… big?”

“First it was the blue and yellow stripes,” he’d shouted, “then it was the clanging noise…are you never satisfied, woman?”

Mother Nature had held up her  hands.  “You asked my opinion… and another thing…”

God had sighed.  “Now what?”

“I just wondered about chemical resistance, you know what mankind is like.”

God folded his arms glowering in silence.

“Oh forget it, just smaller then,” she’d sighed.

Aeons later, he rolled up his sleeves and began work on the prototype again.

“I hope you’re not going to say I told you so,” he muttered.

“Would I ever?….”

This week I’ve incorporated a new page on this site – Book Worm.  If you’ve got the time or the inclination to check out the first post, it’s at Garden Tomes.  Feel free to add your contribution.

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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75 Responses to The Last Word (Friday Fictioneers, August 2013)

  1. Dear Sandra,

    You didn’t have to abandon your first story because it was similar. Obviously great minds think alike. 😉 It’s a very real problem that looms large on our horizon and I couldn’t not write about it. “…you know what mankind is like.” A telling line and a good one.




  2. high five and raspberries says:

    Classic “I told you so” all wrapped up in a funny, yet sad story. Sandra! This is perfect !


  3. misskzebra says:

    Mother Nature and God talking, very interesting concept.


  4. Dee says:

    I loved this one Sandra, I could just imagine the conversation, so typical 🙂


  5. Adam Ickes says:

    Love it. Gave me a good chuckle to start the morning.


  6. Helena Hann-Basquiat says:

    Excellent as always, Sandra.


  7. vb holmes says:

    “Big”…”blue and yellow stripes”…”clanging noise”: sounds like God had over-the-top plans for some members of the order hymenoptera which rankled Mother Nature’s sensibilities.


  8. howanxious says:

    It is sad that the one who is considered to be the wisest is responsible for the degradation of the ecosystem. Interesting tale and quite ingenious because I wasn’t expecting anything(a conversation) like that. 🙂


  9. I hope Mother Nature straightens him out. Not to be disrespectful but he’s blown it more than a few times! Creative and relevant piece, Sandra.


  10. Good job of wrapping insight in humor, Sandra.



  11. Joe Owens says:

    We humans will mess anything up given enough discretion. It just is the way we are.


  12. Linda Vernon says:

    I like that Mother nature can hold her own against the Big Guy! HA! Cute story Sandra. 😀


  13. elmowrites says:

    You and Rochelle have two sides of the same coin here – I love the character you put into this piece – you got me laughing and thinking at the same time, which is a great way to put out a message. Long live the bees!
    If I might offer a concrit, the tense of the first part (he had sighed, she had laughed, etc) had me stumbling a bit. Might be cleaner as simple past (he sighed, she laughed, whatever), although I do see you want to distinguish then and now. Just an observation, it didn’t detract from my enjoyment.


  14. Sandra says:

    That’s a fairly standard problem with trying to do ‘then’ and ‘now’ so I’d edited to take a couple of ‘had’s’ out of it to try and mitigate the problem. Obviously not enough. 😉


  15. Hi Sandra,
    God should have known, Mother is always right. Creative and heavenly take on the photo. Ron


  16. Each week I enjoy your stories, this one is no exception.


  17. JackieP says:

    Great conversation. 🙂


  18. zennjennc says:

    excellent conversation


  19. kz says:

    lol very clever! 🙂 i loved the conversation between God and Mother Nature. I suppose behind every great man is a brilliant woman ^^


  20. Jan Brown says:

    I love the interaction between God and Mother Nature!


  21. A match made in heaven. Great story.


  22. rckjones says:

    Loving the adorable husband/wife feel of the relationship between God and Mother Nature. Delightful!


  23. EagleAye says:

    Love it. I imagine the creative team of God and Mother Nature had to have some fractious moments during the process. Great fun with this one.


  24. God is a man?!?!
    Who would have thunk it?
    Cool story.


  25. Honie Briggs says:

    Sandra, This dialogue is terrific!


  26. troy P. says:

    I loved being a fly on the wall, so to speak, (vs. bee) to this little chat between the two – genius!


  27. JKBradley says:

    If lost, He wouldn’t stop to ask for directions either.


  28. unspywriter says:

    It’s not nice to fool Mother Nature! 😉 A light, but good, take on a serious problem.

    Here’s mine:


  29. wmqcolby says:

    Interesting that the bee actually, according to modern-day engineers, can’t fly (or isn’t supposed to).
    Love your writing, Sandra! Always a go-to story each week.


  30. Mother knows best! I loved this take. You went beyond the photo and created another world. Nice!


  31. annisik51 says:

    A conversation between God and Mother Nature. I like that. Best bit is the comment about humankind. Ann


  32. I was going to say that you were brave to write such a dialogue, but it seems the company we keep on this platform is enlightened enough to not be defended. I wish people could experience where I live at present. It would be blasphemy! Glad I found you guys. It’s a relief to be able to speak and be safe.


    • Sandra says:

      This is the second time I’ve written a piece in this vein, and I must confess I do wonder whether some people might be offended. In my defence (and without getting heavy about it) I’d say that my God has a sense of humour. I’m sorry that you live in a culture where you’re not free to speak and write freely. (And equally sorry if I’ve offended anyone.)


      • I’m sure you didn’t. Look forward to your contribution next week. It’s challenging to come up with ideas that are creative and if it pushes boundaries, so much the better.


  33. That’s great. Really enjoyable. But aren’t we meant to writing fiction?


  34. Dear Sandra,

    You always are right on the money with your stories. I love your take on the design process. No wonder it took 4.5 billion years.




  35. summerstommy2 says:

    Good one Sandra I like the idea that God and Mother Nature met to discuss such things.


  36. hmv says:

    Funny, yet poignant… I’d never thought of God and Mother Nature as ‘partners in crime’ – very interesting idea 🙂


  37. pattisj says:

    Cute story! The clanging noise…love it!


  38. I loved this! Being right is the best!


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