Attack! (Trifextra 33 Word Challenge)

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Frantic fingers fumble,

searching, carelessly casting things aside.

 She struggles, head swimming

lungs aching, panic rising.

 And then

rescue.

 A friend in need,

a friend indeed.

 Relax…

inhale…

 sod it… empty

 Now what?

 

 It’s a while since I entered a Trifextra challenge.  This week the challenge was to write 33 words about ‘what scares you’.  This was my own particular nightmare.  

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About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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38 Responses to Attack! (Trifextra 33 Word Challenge)

    • Sandra says:

      Thank you for reading. I tried to comment on yours but couldn’t see how to do that easily, (or it wasn’t working). I enjoyed it though, very effective piece.

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  1. howanxious says:

    That is a bad situation… I have experienced this. Powerful write. 🙂
    -HA

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  2. Glynis says:

    I had my first this year so well put!

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  3. Sandra says:

    Sorry to hear that; it can be very frightening.

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  4. Suzanne says:

    Definitely a scary experience! And you’ve captured the panic so well. Nice to see you back here Sandra! 🙂

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  5. Nothing scarier than not being able to breathe. You’ve captured the panic very well. So pleased to see your name in the challenge this weekend. I’ve missed reading your writing, Sandra. :))

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  6. Steve Lakey says:

    The panic starts again? The spacing of the words adds to the tension.

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  7. I quit in 1999. Years later I was driving to a stressful situation and found myself digging in my purse. Looking for those cigs of long ago. No wonder I smoked.

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  8. Lumdog says:

    Vivid description of panic. Nicely written.

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  9. Bastet says:

    Good write, powerful and yes I think it would be terrifying!

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  10. I lost my own breath reading this. Panic indeed! Love the pace of this. Thanks for linking up and don’t forget to come back and vote!

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  11. Valerie says:

    This really and truly would be terrifying! Excellent piece!

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  12. Draug419 says:

    I think I felt a bit short of breath myself. Great work!

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  13. jannatwrites says:

    Thank goodness I’ve never had an asthma attack – it sounds absolutely terrifying. Staying calm is important, but I don’t know how you stay calm when you can’t breathe!

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  14. Fabulous work, love the alliteration too 🙂

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  15. I know the panic only too well having played that scene out…shaking the spray as if it will magically fill with more ventolin ( asthma spray) .captured well 🙂

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  16. Linda Vernon says:

    Edge of my chair wonderful Sandra! Maybe her heroin, or her cigarettes? Whatever it is, you really sold it!.

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  17. joetwo says:

    I can relate. It is hard to do anything when you can’t breathe during an attack.

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  18. KymmInBarcelona says:

    I could feel the panic way over here!

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