A Safe Distance – Friday Fictioneers, August 2018

Copyright Nathan Sowers

 

His face looms over her; he’s breathing heavily in concentration.

Safely behind the mirror, she examines him with detachment, something she could never do when she was alive.

He’s aging.  Bright red capillaries lace across his cheeks, the tip of his nose is oddly blue, and he hasn’t shaved in weeks.

He keeps calling her back.  Scrying for her, time and time again.

She can’t stop him, but takes consolation in his frustration at her untouchability, her silence, her inscrutability.

“Why choose death over me?” he sobs.

If he needs to ask the question, then he already has the answer.

 

What a terrific photo!  Well done, Nathan.  Back after two weeks of family time, and in the unique position of having three efforts to choose from for this week’s Friday Fictioneers.  This was the least depressing of them. 🙂  Good news that our leader, Rochelle Wisoff Fields has embarked upon another book – sounds like a winner. 

 

 

About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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84 Responses to A Safe Distance – Friday Fictioneers, August 2018

  1. Dear Sandra,

    Scry is a new word for me. And I love learning new words. Love the description of his face. An intriguing view from the other side. As always, well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    PS Thanks for the book shout out. I’ve high hopes for this one.

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  2. Varad says:

    Fantastic and descriptive writing, Sandra. Right from his physical descriptions to their relationship or lack of it. Great job indeed.

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  3. Iain Kelly says:

    Which begs the question of what she is escaping from exactly. Very well written as always Sandra.

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  4. abhiray59 says:

    Sad, but true. Everyone has to go. Who will explain this to one who lost his loved one?

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  5. I love the ending of this piece. Great atmosphere

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  6. pennygadd51 says:

    Wow! You’ve told that story with great strength. And what a killer last line! I love, too, your delight in words; any story containing both ‘scrying’ and ‘inscrutability’ deserves a round of applause for the language alone.
    Kudos!

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  7. Anita says:

    Had she committed suicide?
    He has realized her worth. Alas! It’s too late…
    The Haunted House – Anita

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  8. Perhaps she fake her death, and views him from behind a two-way mirror. She must have been desperate. And he seems more wrapped up in his pain then in the fact she ‘chose death’.

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  9. Dale says:

    Brilliant, Madam. Love how you described this in wonderful detail…

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  10. prior.. says:

    really feel his desperation and lostness and the details of his looks were so vivid

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  11. neilmacdon says:

    Lovely word “scrying” and a fascinating multi-layered story. One of your best, Sandra

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  12. The answer is in the question. Is there just a mirror between us and those who’ve passed? Why not?
    Tracey

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  13. Oh the details you can see when you can watch someone with detachment only death can bring… love those, and the way he probably knows he’s the reason for her leaving.

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  14. michael1148humphris says:

    This is a great story, you leave so much unsaid for the reader to decided, I liked it a lot

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  15. granonine says:

    Nothing like a dollop of witchcraft to make things interesting 🙂 Loved that last line.

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  16. What has come has to go… Brilliant story. And as for scry for a moment I thought it was a typo but then I went to the dictionary. Wow.. That goes into my use now.

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  17. StuHN says:

    Instead of a photograph trapping a person’s soul, the scrying mirror did the deed. A suicides life force is not a tranquil one.

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  18. Akshata Ram says:

    The emotions have been so aptly described.

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  19. I have to admit that I feel like I’m missing something here that everyone else is getting. From the broken capillaries, I presume that he’s alcoholic and maybe abusive. He’s scrying for her, which must mean that he knows something of fortune telling or witchcraft. And the last line, choosing death over me…does that definitely mean he’s been abusive? (Sorry, my mind continues to be a sieve.)

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    • Sandra says:

      There’s no conclusive answer, Sascha. I’ve left it open as to why she felt she had to be free of him, the point rather being that his lack of sensitivity/perception to her feelings/emotions about whatever he represents – that’s essentially the reason why. He would never change, if he never saw the reason why he had to.

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  20. Lynn Love says:

    Ooh, this works so well. That driving need of his to see her, and yet he still doesn’t – never will? – understand why she chose death. Her revenge seems apt and utterly satisfying. Welcome back Sandra

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  21. One wonders what occurred before her death. An intriguing and thought-provoking piece.

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  22. subroto says:

    She doesn’t answer back cos we all know that big girls don’t scry (sorry Sandra).
    Intriguing story.

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  23. Priya says:

    What an awesome take! loved it. I liked how she was observing him. Gave me goosebumps.

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  24. Jelli says:

    “… already has the answer.” Indeed! Love this line. The story scrys of regrets. well done.

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  25. jillyfunnell says:

    I am intrigued to know how this situation came about but I also think he knows exactly why it did. Brilliant take.

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  26. Ditto to all that’s been said before me.
    Always a winning story, Sandra. Thanks for the new word: scry.
    Isadora 😎

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  27. Scry? I’ll google it and use it presently, great take on the prompt by the way!

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  28. lisarey1990 says:

    This is really thought-provoking & well detailed. A great job.

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  29. draliman says:

    Crumbs. He must have been really nasty to her for her to have taken this course. I love how she takes a certain delight (to my read-through) in how he’s getting older and more haggard, and of course unsuccessful in his scrying.

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  30. Rowena says:

    Firstly, Sandra, this is a brilliant piece of writing and psychology, which has got me thinking into what happened between them and who is the ultimate villain.She seems to take delight in his grief and torment and very unfeeling. Yet, those emotions don’t exist in a vacuum. What was his role? She could well have had serious mental health issues, which twisted her perceptions of him. He could well have been an alcoholic, violent and yet it remains a mystery.
    I also hadn’t heard of the word scry and suspected a type but as no one else had pointed it out, checked Google out instead. What a great word. Thanks very much.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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  31. 4963andypop says:

    It’s always interesting to guess what the dead think about the living. After this post, I will surely never look at a mirror the same way again!

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  32. An intriguing tale, so wonderfully worded. I love your unique take on the photo. Well-done!

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  33. Wonderful perspective!

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  34. I love the way you have described his face. And ‘scrying’ is a new word that I learnt today.

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  35. I always heard people could haunt you from the other side. I sense he is feeling guilty, and the last line confirms it.

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  36. Kalpana Solsi says:

    I googled scry and am glad I learnt a new word.
    It is difficult to say who the tormentor is .

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  37. gahlearner says:

    Unique and great story, Sandra (and not predictable at all 🙂 ). I think she has her revenge for whatever it is he did to her. He’ll never find peace.

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  38. Sarah Ann says:

    You give us a glimmer of what your character might have had to put up with in life. I imagine her behind the mirror rearing back as he approaches, then possibly reaching out a finger to poke him on his spreading red nose. Wonderfully done – the hints at her pain while alive and his now she is gone.

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  39. Awesome telling of what must have been a miserable life- and it continues! Relationships sure can be complex.

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  40. plaridel says:

    what a sad state of affairs. both of them should learn to move on.

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  41. Scrying – that’s new to me. Thank you.
    See above: can they both move on? Interesting challenge for the author.

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