The Coat of Many Heartbreaks – Friday Fictioneers, October 2019

Copyright Jean L Hays

Even as he left, she set about patching up the hole he’d left in her life.

Firm, neat stitches, and soon you could scarcely tell he’d been there at all.

Inevitably, more repairs became necessary in time, some simply requiring a darning needle, others warranting a whole new patch to overlay the damage.

She became stronger than she’d ever hoped, her handiwork repelling all further onslaughts; her resilience surprised even her closest friends.

And then came Daniel.

Just one stray thread needed to give way, one knot to loosen, one scrap of material to fray.

And she began to unravel once more.

 

Friday Fictioneers is celebrating its seventh year under the inimitable leadership of Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.  Members come and go but a few of us stalwarts remember when she took over from Madison Woods.  A good day for our happy band of writers.  Thanks Rochelle, for all that you do. 

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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59 Responses to The Coat of Many Heartbreaks – Friday Fictioneers, October 2019

  1. Beautifully written take on the photo prompt, Sandra.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  2. neilmacdon says:

    Lovely use of the metaphor, Sandra

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  3. Dear Sandra,

    It seems her taste in men leaves something to be desired. Stunningly well-woven piece with golden threads.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  4. Splendid metaphor in this. The first two lines are really powerful and dragged me into the story. Well done.

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  5. trentpmcd says:

    Great metaphor. Works well.

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  6. pennygadd51 says:

    You describe very well how the damage from a bad relationship can linger and undermine future relationships. I hope Daniel is the real deal, with enough wisdom and love to help her heal fully.

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  7. What well sewn analogy, Sandra! You wove it so well throughout that it made a lovely little tapestry. 🙂

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  8. granonine says:

    The word “metaphor” shows up a lot in the comments, and indeed it should. Perfectly stitched, not one slip into a different metaphor or analogy. Here’s to Daniel, in hopes that he manages to help her heal.

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  9. Iain Kelly says:

    A fully formed metaphor. Well done.

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  10. bearmkwa says:

    Oh! What an excellently woven tale, indeed! Love the way you carried the metaphor throughout! Great stuff!

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  11. I wonder why there isn’t someone to mend… where is the tailor of when you really need one?

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  12. liz young says:

    How beautifully crafted your story is – ‘unravelling’ a perfect simile.

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  13. M K Zebra says:

    All the times we say we’re not going to let it happen to us again. Been there, done that, may possibly do it again.

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  14. msjadeli says:

    Wonderful use of metaphor here.

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  15. Dale says:

    This was brilliantly done, Sandra. You pulled me in immediately and oh… damn…

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  16. draliman says:

    Great metaphor. Maybe unravelling a little for Daniel will be a good thing…

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  17. I know everyone else has said but I’ll it too because it’s true – wonderful metaphor!

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  18. Metaphoric magic, brilliant stuff, we are a fragile race really and most folk don’t know what goes on in a person’s head.

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  19. James McEwan says:

    Wonderful.I enjoyed how you managed to capture the emotion of the cycle of heart break. Life can feel like that at times.

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  20. Tannille says:

    Great picture you created with words. She’s coming undone.

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  21. Lynn Love says:

    I wpnder if she’ll be able to stitch her life back together again. Wonderfully structured and told. another splendid story, Sandra

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  22. 4963andypop says:

    Lovely description of the struggle against ones own vulnerability in love. I assume you intended the allusion to josephs coat of many colors in your title, though the only connection I can see is the peril she finds herself in, as Joseph did when attacked by his brothers.

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  23. Abhijit Ray says:

    No matter how many stitches, when flood gates open everything is blown away.

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  24. She was perfectly stitched up and tended to. But, that’s not a good way to live life. To find wonder and beauty requires being vulnerable and willing to be hurt. Brilliantly written, Sandra!

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  25. Nan Falkner says:

    Wow! You write one heck of a story – WELL DONE! I mean really publish quality! You have a wonderful way with words!

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  26. magarisa says:

    Flawless, compelling writing! A wonderful analogy.

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  27. Nobbinmaug says:

    Brilliant metaphor for the wear and tear our emotions endure.

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  28. Clever story. I could relate to her so well!

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